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Help please!!! Highlight the word or phrase that makes the thesis statement wordy.

Help please!!! Highlight the word or phrase that makes the thesis statement wordy-example-1
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Answer:

" Although meant to ensure student safety and security"

Step-by-step explanation:

It would be a lot less wordy if you got rid of this phrase. The thesis is supposed to be shorter and get the point across. they could've said metal detectors destroy academic culture and be done.

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