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Revise the following sentences to emphasize the perspective of the audience and the "you" view.

1. To help us process your order with our new database software, we need you to go to our website and fill out the customer information required.

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You are required to go to our website to fill out the required customer information. This will help us process your order.

Step-by-step explanation:

The customer or client does not need to be informed of the existence of our new database software. We can simply request the customer to fill out the enclosed form by going to our website. This approach is more business-like and courteous. It emphasizes the customer as the subject and what the customer is required to do. The focus is shifted to the customer and not to the company. The customer learns immediately that his or her actions (going to the website and filling the form) are in their own interest.

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