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Does this paragraph sound coherent and lucid with good grammar? What should I fix up to make it sound flawless?:

"What I learned about this year in art is shading and the different types of it such as; standard, hatching, crosshatching, and stippling. My favorite part about art this year is the fun-filled activities and projects with groups and my least favorite part about it is the dull assignments that come with it. What I wish I could’ve done this year is to be a little more productive and work harder. What you could’ve done better to help me is to make sure I was well informed on certain assignments and projects so I could do them without any difficulties. Even so, I thought you were helpful enough and considerate. "



Does the response above fit the questions below? :

"In 1 paragraph, tell me what you learned about this year! (try to be specific and show that you actually learned it!) and what was your favorite part about art this year? What was your least favorite part? What do you wish you could have done this year? And lastly, what do you think I could have done better to help you this school year?"

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Answer: edits in bold

Step-by-step explanation:

This year in art i have learned about shading, and different ways of doing it, such as; standard, hatching, crosshatching, and stippling. My favorite part about art this year is the fun-filled activities and projects with groups. However, my least favorite parts are the dull assignments that come with it. This year, i wish i worked harder and was a little more productive. To help me, you could’ve made sure I was well informed on certain assignments and projects so I could do them without any difficulties. Nonetheless, I thought you were helpful and considerate.

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Answer:

I think it is great and you did everything they asked you for. Well done!

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