Directions: Read the passage and then select the best answer to the question that follows.
I am applying for this job because I am very interested in engineering. I have studied
engineering for the past four years, and I will earn my diploma in early May. I have done
extensive research into the uses of robots in the home. I have also developed a prototype of
a vacuum cleaner that is powered by dust.
What feedback would be most helpful to someone who asked you to examine the sentence variety of this passage?
Try incorporating some shorter sentences and being more direct. These sentences are very long and make it easy
for the reader to lose track of the main point.
This is great! All the sentences here are long and contain lots of information, which means that you're giving
readers a lot to think about.
Try varying the structure of your sentences. They all start with the word I, and the repetition might make readers
lose interest.
O