Question

Rewrite the short story so that it is more descriptive

Answer 1

Elise painted almost daily, and used a variety of different paints in order to win the community art contest. Elise’s sister Cecily made fun of Elise and joked that she would fail the contest. Elise was furious at her sister.

Answer 2

I attempted an example, hopefully it works.

Example:

Elise frequently painted a lot and used a variety of different paints so that she could win the community art contest. Her sister, Cecily, would often tease her and make Elise question that she might not win the contest. Elise got distressed with Cecily.