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My sister wrote this story and she wants to know if its good.

“I shouldn’t have done this!” I said as the unicorn I was riding burst into full speed. As the unicorn slowed down I realized we were going into pitch-black darkness. I tried to make the unicorn turn back but I couldn’t. I heard a shrill screaming and I didn’t know where it was coming from.

“Are you still screaming?” Someone said behind me. Surprisingly, there was a girl around my age looking straight at me. “Um, what?” I said confused. “You were screaming,” she said smiling. “And very loudly I might add.” “Sorry I didn’t even realize it.” I said embarrassed. I looked forward and saw a huge bush that the unicorn was about to crash into.

I was exhilarated to see that the bush opened into a doorway that led to a dazzling golden castle. As the unicorn went through the doorway I saw so many pixies and more unicorns than I could count. As I came closer to the castle I saw that the castle grew a story bigger. I got off the unicorn and walked up the front steps. As I approached the door someone grabbed my hand. “This place is like a double rainbow over a shimmering lake.” I heard behind me.

“Hey, are you a fairy or a witch?” A girl asked curiously as I turned around. “Um, does it matter?” I said questioningly. “Yeah, if your a witch you’re evil and if your a fairy you’re nice.” She said. “But what if a witch is nice and a fairy is mean. That wouldn’t make much sense to your logic then, would it?” I said trekking back up the stairs.

As I went into the building up the stairs I saw an office with a girl at the desk of about 15 years old. “Hey, do you know who the headmistress is?” I asked lurking outside the office. “That would be me.” She said grinning. “Oh, sorry.” I said. “It’s alright. You’ll be having a lesson later today with all the other students. Here’s a hint: You’re perfect just the way you are.” As I walked up more of the stairs I took in mind the question that the girl asked me before I went into the castle.

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