The letter has been revised to enhance clarity, punctuation, and coherence, expressing congratulations more directly and refining the wording for a more polished and professional tone.
Dear Allison,
(1) Congratulations on your promotion to the head of sales! (2) My sister, Michaela, has recently ventured into the field of marketing, and I am wondering if she could interview you for an assignment she is working on for one of her courses. (3) She is available on Monday, Tuesday, or Wednesday of next week. (4) I appreciate your consideration in sharing your expertise, and I hope you will be open to fulfilling this request.
Best,
Quinn
In this corrected version, adjustments have been made to improve clarity, punctuation, and overall coherence. Commas were added after "sister" and "Michaela" to enhance readability and to separate essential information. The wording in sentence (1) was modified to convey a more direct expression of congratulations. Additionally, in sentence (4), the phrase "considering lending your expertise" was revised to "your consideration in sharing your expertise" for smoother and more formal communication. The letter maintains a polite and professional tone while ensuring that the intended message is conveyed accurately.