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I'm writing this for English is there anything I should add/change?

Dickens describes France with disdain when he writes that they “... rolled with exceeding smoothness down hill, making paper money and spending it.” (Dickens 7). While the commoners starve the aristocracy live an extravagant and luxurious lifestyle. Dickens shows us the aristocracy is ruining France’s economy by saying they “... rolled with exceeding smoothness down hill…” This example tells us that France is quickly and effortlessly getting worse. The connotation of this example can be compared to a saying when something goes “downhill,” this means it becomes worse or less successful, which perfectly describes France’s economy. Saying France is making “paper” money and then immediately “spending it” shows that they are not worried about the commoners, they continue to live their lavish lifestyle even at the cost of people's lives.

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Looks good to me however if your getting graded on punctuation you should add a coma to the sentence “while the commoners starve the aristocracy live an extravagant and luxurious lifestyle “ in between “starve” and “the” to make it “while the commoners starve, the aristocracy live an extravagant and luxurious lifestyle” (I hope this makes sense)
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i think it looks good!

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