Question

Start with one of the following sentences and write a paragraph that creates a picture for your reader. Use concrete, specific language and vivid comparisons wherever possible. By the time I arrived, the house was a mass of flames.

Answer 1

by the time i arrived. i looked at the house in utter shock. the house was in a mass of flames. i stood there in shock as i watched my home burn away into nothing but ash

Answer 2

When I arrived, the house was a mass of flames. I was desperate not knowing what to do or what caused this situation, I could only think of how to save my poor cat, but the fear and the flames prevented me from entering the house to save the animal. In the midst of my despair and my eyes blurred by tears that never stopped falling, I see my cat on a tree calling for me and that brings me an inexplicable comfort.