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Which revision improves the flow of the paragraph?

Read the body paragraph from an essay.
"Lords who owned land in Japan certainly had armies.
These professional soldiers fought when they were
called on. There were also farmers whom lords could
call on for help when needed."
"Lords who owned land in Japan certainly had
armies. These professional soldiers fought when they
were called on. However, lords also had farmers
whom they could call on for help when needed."
O "However, lords who owned land in Japan certainly
had armies. These professional soldiers fought when
they were called on. Lords also had farmers whom
they could call on for help when needed."
O "Lords who owned land in Japan certainly had
armies. However, these professional soldiers fought
when they were called on. Lords also had farmers
whom they could call on for help when needed."
"Lords who owned land in Japan certainly had
armies. These professional soldiers, however, fought
when they were called on. Lords also had farmers
whom they could call on for help when needed."

Which revision improves the flow of the paragraph? Read the body paragraph from an-example-1

2 Answers

4 votes

Answer:

the first one (A)

Step-by-step explanation:

User Davidthings
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4 votes

Answer:

the first one

Step-by-step explanation:

B and C just don't feel right, and d doesn't make sense where the however was placed, so the answer is A (the top or first one)

User Bor Laze
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