Question

Rate my story so far. It's only the beginin. there is so much more, but still.

I’m running. I’m running as fast as I can. I hear the dogs barking at me as I run down the street. I looked to see if they were still following me. I trip over a rock and suddenly the person is right over me. He bends down and then. BEEP BEEP BEEP BEEP. I wake up and rub my eyes. I’ve been having this same dream for a couple of nights now. Every single time, it ends at the same place. I don’t know what to think or say. My mom is thinking of taking me to a shrink. I know I’m not crazy though. It feels so real. I get out of bed and walk to my closet. Today I am moving to live with my Grandma and Grandpa. My mother is moving to Las Vegas for a Job and I don’t want to live there. My dad already has another family, and I don’t want to interrupt their happy lives with my crazy one.

Answer 1

So far so good! I suggest that you make the information a little bit more spread out though like don't condense all of this information into one paragraph and instead put a little more explanation into each topic.

Answer 2

Pretty good writing, I bet you can write more