Question

Proofreading this assignment as I'm not very good at English.

Dear Mrs. Gonzalez:
we can help your Sales Staff by providing your firm with a new dimention of client service and
with office space and studioes. Clients looking for new office facilitys often ask about desks,
filling cabinets chairs and carpeting. They is interested in prices and availability of these items
this is were we come in to help close the sale for you. At no charge to you we can furnish a
complete floorplan to fit any offices you offer this will be a important sales aid to you that will
pay off and faster increase sales?
Alert Real Estate Firms like yours is always looking for new and creative concepts and selling.
We would be happy to met with you or one of your key representatives to provide more
information and discuss how we might work to gether. Please give us a call the next time you
have a client with an office furneshing need we will prove that this service will work for you.
Yours Truely,
Manny Kaelin
President
21st Century Office Interiors LLC

Answer 1

First line you need a comma after Mrs Gonzalez. First line capital letter to start ‘We’

First paragraph ‘new dimension of client service, office space and studios***.’ ‘Clients looking for new office facilities***.’ You need a comma after filing cabinets and lastly in the first paragraph you need to change ‘they is’ to ‘they are’. And a full stop at the end of that paragraph

Second paragraph. Needs to start with a capital letter ‘This’. ‘At no charge to you**comma**....’ ‘any offices you offer**comma**...AS this will be AN important sales aid that will pay off and help with increased sales efficiently.’ ‘Estate firms like yours ARE always looking for new...’

Last paragraph. ‘Happy to MEET’ ‘together’ is one word. ‘Have a client with office FURNISHING (change need to needed) and end with a full stop and then begin new sentence. We will prove that this service will work for you.

Step-by-step explanation:

Glad to help if you need me to explain everything let me know. I’ve put spelling mistakes etc in capitals so it’s easy for you to see!