Just asking for opinions on my poem that I made, need to know if there are any flaws or mistakes in it, thank you!
This song is emotional, but not that blue,
I gave you my heart, now you have two,
I gave you my love, as did you,
It warms my heart, to know you love me too,
One day, under the full moon,
I wish to take away your breath, like a thieving goon,
Through your gleaming eyes, gleaming crystal eyes,
You will see a diamond crystal, in a golden tie,
All I want from you, all I wish,
Is for you to say, I do love you too.