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Read the sentence.

After school, Robbie likes to play video games, and when Robbie is playing video games after school, he likes to have a snack.

Which revision corrects the wordiness and redundancy in the sentence?


After school, while Robbie is playing video games, he also likes to have something to eat, like a snack.

After school, Robbie likes to play video games and have a snack.

After school, Robbie likes to play video games and at the same time he is playing he likes to have a snack.

After school, Robbie likes to play video games and while he is playing video games he likes to have a snack.

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After school, Robbie likes to play video games and have a snack

Uses both subjects in the sentence and doesn’t have extra words or unnecessary things in the sentence.
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