Question

After reading the paragraph below, rewrite it by adding transitions to sentences and improving the flow from one sentence to the next.

Kwami liked to ride dirt bikes. Kwami's mom didn't like him to ride dirt bikes. Kwami and his friends rode the dirt bikes on the motocross course near Michael's house. Kwami was very good. He won many of the races. Kwami decided to enter a real race, Kwami convinced his mom to come watch. She was frightened when she saw how he made his dirt bike fly over the hills. His mom was excited when he won his race.

Answer 1

Kwami liked riding dirt bikes a lot, although his mom didn't like it. He and his friends rode their dirt bikes on the motocross course near their friend Michael's house. Kwami was very good and won many races, so he decided to enter a real race. He convinced his mom to watch him and she got so scared every time his dirt bike flew over the hills, but at the end of the race she was so exited that he won.

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Answer 2

Kwami liked to ride dirt bikes but, his mom didn't like it when he rode them. Kwami and his friends rode their dirt bikes on the motocross course near Michael's house. Kwami was very good and won many of the races he and his friends held. Kwami decided to enter a real race, and convinced his mom to watch. She was frightened when she saw his dirt bike fly over the hills but, was excited when he won the race.

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