Answer:
Step-by-step explanation:
Page 1:
Try not to use got. So instead of "got selected" use "was selected."
I've read "The Giver" so I know the story, and who Gabriel is, but your reader may not, you don't explain on page 1, and you should.
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Lower case "eleven"
Also, "stirrings" aren't the same as being released, or a reason to be released. There is a disconnect there.
Also, it would be nurturer of the baby. You're missing an r.
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The baby could not choose between being released or not.
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Don't start a sentence with "And" you've done it twice.
You're missing the end, it's cut off. I don't know your grade, but good work.