Question

Make this sentence more descriptive.

The German shepherd growled angrily at Kendrick when he jumped over the fence to retrieve his ball.

Answer 1

Growling angrily, the massive German shepherd startled Kendrick who was quickly jumping over the white picket fence to retrieve his worn baseball.

Step-by-step explanation:

The first version is confusing. A reader may not understand if Kendrick or the dog is jumping over the fence with the use of "he". By clarifying this and including more active, descriptive words, we can create a better sentence.