Question

Can anybody please proofread my 10-12 sentence paragraph? I just need someone’s revision and to tell me if it’s good or nah. If not, please tell me how to make it better like a better topic sentence, grammar mistakes, how to shorten it, something like that. Thank you!

Answer 1

bro this is good

Step-by-step explanation:

this is great bro u dont need to shorten it