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Original: It was a beautiful place. I’d love to go back someday.

Revision: The landscape was beautiful, and I’d love to go back someday!

What change is made to add variety in the revision?

A restrictive clause is added to clarify what the landscape was like.
The word beautiful is changed to landscape to be more specific.
Two simple sentences are turned into a compound sentence.

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Answer: Two simple sentences are turned into a compound sentence.

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