Question

Can you guys double check my paragraph i’m not really good at English.. Thanks

Nature in cities really matters, as it gives great views along with other benefits. I live in Makkah, and unfortunately, nature is almost nonexistent. Makkah needs to be green in some areas such as the streets and gardens. Moreover, governments should insist people on planting more and surround cities with trees. The weather in Makkah is mostly hot and there is not much nature to help. As a result temperature keeps on rising every year. And that has a huge impact on wildlife. Some animals are unable to survive during the day from heat. Lastly, nature is very important for us as human beings as well, is connected to humans’ general health and well-being.

Answer 1

Makkah needs to be (greener)

and (surrounding) cities with trees

the weather in Makkah is mostly hot and there ( isn’t)much nature

as a result (the) temperature keeps on rising

(it is) connected to (human’s)


the part in brackets is the correction, hope this helps. Apart from the small mistakes your english is wonderful :)

Answer 2

i corrected some words and add some sentence hope it will help u

Step-by-step explanation:

Nature in cities really matters, as it gives great views along with other benefits. I live in Makkah, and unfortunately, nature is almost nonexistent. Makkah needs to be green in some areas such as the streets and gardens. Moreover, governments should raise awareness to people on planting more and surrounding cities with trees. The weather in Makkah is mostly hot and there is not much nature to help. As a result temperature keeps on rising every year. And that has a huge impact on wildlife. Some animals are unable to survive during the day from heat. Lastly, nature is very important for us as human beings as well, is connected to humans’ general health and well-being.so,we will stop deforestation and and raise awareness to do afforestation. SAVE TREE SAVE LIFE.