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Hey! I think this is an amazing paragraph! I do have a few tips. The first sentence maybe shouldn't start with the word slime. I would recommend saying: A fifteen year old girl named Samantha Zumwalt started a slime business to... (and then the reason why the business was started) Everything else looks amazing! Good luck!

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User Mateusz Gebroski
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you did perfect , I could understand it easily

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