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Instructions: Revise the following sentences as described. Pay close attention to what you are being asked to correct and make only as many revisions as necessary. Take special care to preserve the meaning of the original material. If necessary, invent reasonable details. Rewrite the entire sentence and use appropriate punctuation and capital letters.

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Answer:

1. In the following sentence, the real subject is obscured by a grammatical expletive. Revise the sentence so that the real subject appears prominently.

There are three CERCLA sites in the Buhl area.

CERCLE sites in the Buhi area are three.

2. In the following sentence, unnecessary nominalization has obscured the real verb. Revise the sentence to focus on the real verb.

The contractor shall accomplish the removal of all visible overspray.

The contractor shall remove all visible overspray.

3. Revise the following sentence so that it is in the active voice.

Developing a new procedure was rated as the top quality-assurance objective by the division managers.

The division managers rated the development of a new procedure as the top quality-assurance objective.

4. Revise the following sentence to eliminate the awkward, confusing noun string.

The building contains a special incoming materials storage area.

The building contains a special storage area.

5. The following sentence is addressed to general readers. Revise the sentence to remove unnecessary jargon.

Please review this revised report and provide your feedback by April 2; revisions have been printed in bold type to expedite your time input.

Please review this report and provide your feedback on April 2.

6. Revise the following sentence to eliminate pompous language.

It would be helpful toward resolution of this problem if you would review the enclosed report and advise me as to any perceived errors or discrepancies.

Review the enclosed report and advise me of errors or discrepancies.

7. Revise the following sentence to eliminate sexist language.

Each student must complete ENG-302 before he can enroll in ENG-402.

Each student must complete ENG-302 before they can enroll in ENG-402.

8. In the following sentence, convert the negative construction to a positive construction.

During the simulation of the emergency, did the simulator not fail to duplicate conditions not unlike those found in the laboratory?

Did the simulator fail to duplicate conditions found in the laboratory, during the simulation of the emergency?

9. In each of the following two exercises, the second sentence begins with a demonstrative pronoun. Add a noun after the demonstrative to enhance coherence.

The zoning commission has scheduled an open hearing for March 14. This open hearing will enable concerned citizens to voice their opinions on the proposed construction.

The university has increased the number of parking spaces, instituted a shuttle system, and increased parking fees. These measures are expected to ease the parking problems.

10. Provide a topic sentence for this paragraph.

The reason for this difference is that a larger percentage of engineers working in small firms may be expected to hold high-level positions. In firms with fewer than 20 engineers, for example, the median income was $62,200. In firms of 20-200 engineers, the median income was $60,345. For the largest firms, the median income was $58,600.

The reason for the differences in the median incomes of engineers is the size of firms where they work.

11. Rewrite the following sentence in the form of a list.

The causes of burnout can be studied from three perspectives: physiological- the roles of sleep, diet and physical fatigue; psychological- the roles of guilt, fear, jealousy, and frustration; and environmental- the role of physical surroundings at home and work.

The causes of burnout can be studied from three perspectives:

  1. Physiological- the roles of sleep, diet and physical fatigue;
  2. Psychological- the roles of guilt, fear, jealousy, and frustration; and
  3. Environmental- the role of physical surroundings at home and work.

12. Break the following sentence into two or more sentences.

If we get the contract, we must be ready by June 1 with the necessary personnel and equipment, so with this in mind a staff meeting, which all group managers are expected to attend, is scheduled for February 12.

If we get the contract, we must be ready by June 1 with the necessary personnel and equipment. Therefore, a staff meeting, which all group managers are expected to attend, is scheduled for February 12.

13. In the following sentences, the real subjects are buried in prepositional phrases or obscured by expletives. Revise the sentences so that the real subjects appear prominently.

There has been a decrease in the number of students enrolled in our training sessions.

The number of students enrolled in our training sessions has decreased.

The use of in-store demonstrations has resulted in a dramatic increase in business.

The dramatic increase in business resulted from the use of in-store demonstrations.

Step-by-step explanation:

As above.

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