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Hey guys how do you like this poem?

The hatred and betrayal felt
When you've said the things I've done
But the finale words you've sent
Left me hurt and stunned.

"From our family, out into the hate-filled Earth,"
You said, yelling in anger
That I should cold-shouldered out of your hearth
I told that it was you that I called danger

But t'was I who was sent away filled with hatred, despair, and sadness.
And it was you who danced away with joy and gladness.

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Answer:

its beautiful luv

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add more expression tho

User Tspore
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It’s good! The only thing I would suggest is to change “finale” to “final” to make it be read smoothly. Also, maybe change the cold shoulder part of the poem with something else to make it run smoothly. Maybe change it to freeze out?
User Ashwini Raman
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