Question

Can someone tell me if this sounds good or if I need to change it? Its for my Senior Memory Book. Chapter 1: Who Am I? Who am I? If I’m being honest with myself, I’m still trying to figure that out. My name is Bailey Elizabeth Ray, I’m a 17 year old girl who loves her family and spends most of her time reading and listening to music. I love my friends and just hanging out with them. I’m the 2nd born of 4 girls and even though they get on my nervous I love every last one of my sisters. I’m really just a girl who likes living in the moment while also looking forward to all the future brings to me. And I can’t wait to see who I’m becoming.

Answer 1

Hey There!

I think this is amazing what you wrote, there is nothing that you need to change except for the ending sentence, you need to change that into "And I can't wait to see who I become." then it would be perfect.

HOPE THIS HELPS ;)