Question

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He later received an honorable discharge in 1944 after being acquitted of all charges at the court-martial.

Which sentence BEST revises the sentence above to eliminate wordiness?


A)He received an honorable discharge in 1944.B)He received an honorable discharge in 1944 after being acquitted of all charges.C)He later received an honorable discharge after being acquitted at the court-martial.D)He later received a discharge after being acquitted of all charges at the court-martial.

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Answer 1

I believe the best option to eliminate wordiness to be:

B) He received an honorable discharge in 1944 after being acquitted of all charges.

Step-by-step explanation:

Wordiness means taking longer than what is necessary to get to the point. It happens when we use redundant expressions or simply when we use too many words. The sentence we are analyzing here uses "later", "1944" and "after" to indicate time, which is too much. Also, if someone is acquitted of charges, it must happen at a court. Thus if we eliminate "later" and "at the court-martial", the sentence will sound less redundant:

B) He received an honorable discharge in 1944 after being acquitted of all charges.

Therefore, letter B is the option.

Letter A eliminates an important piece of information.

Letter C and D do not offer any relevant changes. They eliminate the year, but the redundant expressions remain.