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The campfire looked nice in the dark.

Which is the best way to revise this sentence using descriptive detail and sensory words?

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In the dark the campfire made everyone have a ghostly glow and it's sharp crackles and pops were like gunfire in the silent night. The smell of smoke was thick and musty in my lungs.

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The orange flames of the campfire licked the black sky, the scorching heat giving off the occasional pop and crackle of burning wood. The blazing fire stood out like a beacon in the dark, illuminating a circle of warm light around it. At gave off that ashy campfire smell that almost seems to hold the essence of late summer nights.
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