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I am writing a poem, and i need me some critics! please help and tell me how you think of this one, thanks!

Well don't you know
I went to lock myself inside,
just to go
run and hide .
Once again
I thought I knew
what to do,
without a plan.

Oh how I was so
Crazy to come and go.
It always bothered me
that people around
me could always be so happy.
They never here that SOUND
aside of everything.

Oh the way they smiled,
made me want to cry
as if they didn't have to try.
I wish I knew the way
not to have to strain
every other day.

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Really great! Just some spelling things like the word crazy in the second paragraph doesn’t need to be capitalized. Also, in the line saying “they never here that SOUND” it should be hear instead of here :). Hope that helps x
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It's really good! Great poem <3

Great writing, you're talented :)

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