Question

Rewrite the altered excerpt from Ray Bradbury's "All Summer in a Day" with the correct punctuation for fluency. It was as if in the midst of a film concerning an avalanche a tornado a hurricane a volcanic eruption something had first gone wrong with the sound apparatus thus muffling and finally cutting off all noise all of the blasts and repercussions and thunders, and then second ripped the film from the projector and inserted in its place a peaceful tropical slide which did not move or tremor The world ground to a standstill The silence was so immense and unbelievable that you felt your ears had been stuffed or you had lost your hearing altogether The children put their hands to their ears They stood apart The door slid back and the smell of the silent, waiting world came in to them

Answer 1

It was as if, in the midst of a film concerning an avalanche, a tornado, a hurricane, a volcanic eruption, something had, first, gone wrong with the sound apparatus, thus muffling and finally cutting off all noise, all of the blasts and repercussions and thunders, and then, second, ripped the film from the projector and inserted in its place a beautiful tropical slide which did not move or tremor. The world ground to a standstill. The silence was so immense and unbelievable that you felt your ears had been stuffed or you had lost your hearing altogether. The children put their hands to their ears. They stood apart. The door slid back and the smell of the silent, waiting world came in to them.