Question

As a teen, I can tell you that during teenage years we go through many changes-both physical and psychological. As our body changes, so does our image of ourselves. Sometimes, this self-image may be low. Maybe the reason such feelings grow within us is because of shallow standards that we have created for others and ourselves. In the midst of all the peer pressure, puerile teasing, and influence of media; there could be a chance that a vulnerable teen would cave into these pressure and opt for a cosmetic surgery. Cosmetic surgeries have various benefits but if they go wrong, the consequences can be devastating.

What makes this introduction weak?

Answer 1

It does not clearly state the argument in the thesis.

Step-by-step explanation:

Plato.

Answer 2

What makes this a weak introduction is it doesn't introduce the purpose at the begining (which I am guessing is, "Cosmetic surgeries have various benefits but if they go wrong, the consequences can be devastating."(You need a hook)), it doesn't explain in detail about what the image of a person is, and you use a lot of 1st person words.

Step-by-step explanation:

Do not use "As" and "I can tell you that" in the first sentence. Simily say, "During puberty children experience many physical and psychological changes." For the second sentence you should say, "For example, our image of ourselves," then talk about what image is and explain it. Try to not use 1st person words too much like, I, we, us, and our.