Question

Is my poem good to turn in I don't want a yes as an answer I want help maybe correcting it or adding to it

is death is what it seems why is it so vividly portrayed in my dreams
told her that I'm human but a different kinda breed
told her that I'm feeling but she don't know what I mean
smokin on that purpurp and sipping up all my lean
none the less
kicking me outta rehab and putting me to the test
im so depressed
always tired but never rest given up but always be given my fin best
maybe fix up this hole in my chest
wit pills and whats left
imma end my self with no mother fing regret.

Answer 1

Maybe don't mention ending your life and other thab that as a (hopefully) future english teacher in about 8 years

i'd give you a 94%