Question

Revise this passage to remove the instance of informal language in order to

maintain a formal style throughout.
Passage
Songwriting, and music in general, have had a huge effect on the lives of
countless young Americans. In the past, songs became stories that provided
young people with a creative outlet and a voice for change. But as technology
has progressed, the creativity of the songwriting process has been lost, and
the importance of music has disappeared. Nobody's writing decent songs
anymore because folks are too busy playing on the Internet or watching
stupid videos on their computers.

Answer 1

Songwriting, and music in general, have had a huge effect on the lives of countless young Americans.

In the past, songs became stories that provided young people with a creative outlet and a voice for change.

But as technology has progressed, the creativity of the songwriting process has been lost, and the importance of music has disappeared.

It seems that since many are occupied with activities like playing on the Internet or watching videos, writing decent songs has become a scarce practice.

Step-by-step explanation:

Answer 2

Songwriting, and music in general, have had a huge effect on the lives of countless young Americans.

In the past, songs became stories that provided young people with a creative outlet and a voice for change.

But as technology has progressed, the creativity of the songwriting process has been lost, and the importance of music has disappeared.

It seems that since many are occupied with activities like playing on the Internet or watching videos, writing decent songs has become a scarce practice.