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Please help me, I want to know if my poem is clear so far, and if there are things I should fix...

My world was once dark,
Not such a sight to see,
No one was there,
No one but me,

My world only got worse,
Unpleasant emotions became my personality,
I was immersed,
In a world full of sentimentality

Then I saw a spark,
It danced around me,
And it whispered,
“I can help you break free”

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Ya this seems correct :P

Hope it helps!

Don't mind the decor... :P i got bored so i kinda messed with it-

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