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Advice for my poem plz:

Dear future me,
This is what I want you to know
You used to always cover things up
But now the world's gonna know

An empty void which covers me,
Out of the light that was my friend
The shadows of the lamppost
The light gone from my eyes

Is this how I'll live the rest of my life,
is this how I'll meet my demise?

Loneliness, a constant companion
Hopelessness, I feel abandoned

When will someone finally see me?
The person I've become
There's a difference between seeing and believing,
and they lack the latter one

When will I see my true beauty?
When will I please myself and not those around me?

Yet here I am,
A scarecrow which scares not one single crow

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Answer:

In the first part

"Dear future me,

This is what I want you to know

You used to always cover things up

But now the world's gonna know"

Maybe change the last know (bolded) to "be aware", "realize", or "see"

Step-by-step explanation:

It sounds repetative. Despite that, very good poem! :)

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