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40 POINTS!!

Can someone tell me if this is any good. My assignment is to write a suspenseful story but my teacher said she didn’t want us all to write a scary story, she said be creative so I thought of a love story. She gave me the first sentence and this is just a rough draft. Please let me know if it sounds like I’m dragging because I think I am.

40 POINTS!! Can someone tell me if this is any good. My assignment is to write a suspenseful-example-1
User Nabil El
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It sounds great good job for me the assignment is okay and keep up the good work!

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I don't feel that the story - so far - is dragging. My only concern is that I don't see any significant elements that would signal a suspenseful story. The only mildly suspenseful part is limited to the first couple of paragraphs.

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Of course, this is just one person's analysis. Let's see what people have to say.

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