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I'm having trouble writing my Personal Narrative of 750 to 2,500 words and I only have 467 words. I need help to finish it. Can someone please help me finish my Personal Narrative writing of 750 words?

A Vacation Gone Bad

Coming from Shreveport, Louisiana from seeing my family in August of 2019 and that's when things started to go wrong my car broke down in Leads, Alabama from there I needed help, I called on my family, church pastor and friends back where I am from (Shreveport, Louisiana) and no one back in Shreveport, Louisiana couldn't help me get back to Norfolk, Virginia so I start calling non-profit organizations and shelters in Leads, Alabama to see who could help me, my children and dog with somewhere to stay are to see if someone could help us get to Norfolk, Virginia. Unfortunately, my family and I ended up staying in Leads, Alabama for a couple of days until I was able to get some help. I had spent the last of the money on the vacation trip and my car was no longer any good (the motor had blown) so I had to leave it behind and find another way of getting back to Norfolk, Virginia. The same day a non-profit organization in Leads, Alabama agreed to help me and my children get back to Norfolk, Virginia. A pastor in Leads, Alabama put my family and me in a uber to get us to the hotel room that he brought for me and my family. The next day I had to leave my un-service dog behind as well because she was not a service animal. Nevertheless, I took my dog to a Birmingham, Alabama dog shelter to be adopted (I had my dog for nine years) and I didn't want to give my dog up because she was family. But I had no choice if I wanted to get back to Norfolk, Virginia. The non-profit organization (Traverlers Aide of Birmingham, Alabama) agreed to help me and my children get back to Norfolk, Virginia. (But not my dog), so, unfortunately, I was left without a dog. The non-profit organization brought my family and I Grey Hound tickets to get back home and gave my family and me money for food. When I finally got back home my children and I got into a car accident inside of a uber that left me and my children badly injured (so at that moment I didn't know what to think are how to feel) I was devastated I felt like a stroke of bad luck had hit us. Because I had a rough vacation of losing my dog, my car, my untie and my first cousin all in one month after everything was over I decided to rent a car and go to North Carolina to get another dog for my children and me for emotional support to help us recover at the end my children and me was back happy and well because we have a brand new dog and car.

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so just kinda go deep into your writing maybe tell a time of when you were scared or happy or mad in this situation go more deep and tell more feeling and maybe some quotation marks in there go all in!

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and have like a oreo the cookie is the intro paragraph and the frosting is all that detail and 2-4 paragraphs in the middle and the bottom cookie is summing up everything.

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Sometimes, things don't always turned out the way as they were planned. Just like my family vacation for example.

My kids and I were coming from Shreveport, Louisiana in August of 2019. We were going to stay there to see our family. But soon before we drove problems had just started to go wrong! To begin, my car broke down in Leads, Alabama. A huge cloud of smoke came shooting out from the motor. I couldn't figure out what to do, but I knew that what had happened wan't good. So I called on my family, church pastor, and friends back where I am from (Shreveport, Louisiana) but unfortunately, nobody there was able to come and help my family get back to Norfolk, Virginia. So, I began calling a bunch of non-profit organizations and shelters in Leads, AL to see who could come and help us. My children and dog needed somewhere to stay and in order for that I needed to see if someone could help us get to Norfolk. But unfortunately, my family and I ended up staying in Leads for a couple of days until we were able to get some help. The problem was that I had spent the last of my money on the vacation trip and now my car was no longer any good and working due to how the motor had blown. So I had to leave it behind and figure out another way of getting back to Norfolk. The same day, one of the non-profit organization in Leads, agreed to help me and my children get back to Norfolk. Thankfully, a pastor in Leads, put my family and I in an uber to get us to the hotel room that he had booked for me and my family. The following day, I had ran into another problem. I was told that I would have to leave my non-service dog behind as well since she was not a certified service animal. Nevertheless, I took my dog to a dog shelter in Birmingham, Alabama to be adopted (This broke my heart since I have had my dog by my side for about nine years) and yet I didn't want to give my dog up because she was like a best friend to me and was a part of our family. But I sadly had no choice, I had to agree to leave her behind if I wanted to get back to Norfolk, Virginia. The non-profit organization (Travelers Aide of Birmingham, Alabama) agreed to help me and my children get back to Norfolk, Virginia. (But sadly not my dog), so I was disappointed that I had left without my dog. The organization brought my family and I Grey Hound tickets so we could get back home, and not only that but the also gave my family and I money for food. (I was very thankful for this) When we finally got back home, my children and I were miserable! On our way coming back we had gotten into a car accident in our uber that left me and my children badly injured. So, at that moment, I didn't know what to think nor how I should feel. After all, it was devastating, well the whole vacation was. I felt like a wrecking ball of bad luck ran into us hard and fast. I mean, I had to deal with a rough vacation of losing my dog, my car, my untie, and even my first cousin all in one months time. But after everything was over we decided to rent a car and go to North Carolina to get another dog for my family. (We were in need for one after our whole traumatizing experience). We got our dog for emotional support to help us recover from this terrible experience in our lives. But thankfully in the end, my children and I were very glad and happy to be back home. I am very thankful for that organization, my car, my dog, this hotel, and the food and money we were given. It warmed my heart to see that our bad experience turned out to give us a lot of good things. So, even though life had thrown a massive curve ball in my family's way, I was still happy to come back home and see my children and I safe, and smiling. (They were glad to be home!) But from that experience, we all looked at each other and knew that we wouldn't be planning another vacation for a while now.

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