Question

The following e-mail message suffers from many writing faults, including poor tone and ineffective persuasive strategy. It originated with a manager and is addressed to her boss. List at least five writing weaknesses.

Answer 1

Writing weakness of the message are listed below:

• Subject line of the meeting "Miserable Meetings" contains a negative tone. A message must have a catchy subject line.
• Opening line of the message is poorly designed.
• The offensive tone throughout the message is used by the manager.
• The message contains argumentative and pushy tone.
• The lack of professional tone.
• The manager should have used a persuasive tone while writing an email to his boss.
• The message should include essential facts and figures to support the statements made by the manager.