Question

Read the paragraph below. Which would be the most helpful peer review comment to make about the writer’s style?

Wolves are a familiar animal in stories and movies. They are usually the bad animal. Some people think wolves are dangerous to people. But is this the truth? Wolves eat sheep and people don’t like that because they’re raising the sheep for themselves and some wolves can even take down cattle. Wolves make scary howls that can frighten people. But a sound can’t hurt you!
“You use the word “wolf” a lot. Can you find a more interesting way to say “wolf”?”
“I think wolves are scary, too. You’ll have to do more to convince me that they’re not!”
“I like your sentences about wolves, especially the ones where you describe how scary they are.”
“It would help me follow your ideas more easily if you broke up some of the longer sentences.”

Answer 1

“I think wolves are scary, too. You’ll have to do more to convince me that they’re not!”

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