Question

PLEASE HELP ME, IS THIS POEM GOOD OR BAD? IM GETTING GRADED

The Dreaming slave

This is my destiny
It will always be.
Just me,
but if I ever let go
Everyone will know.
And they will come
to see me.
And it will be
as beautiful as can be!

When they come
to see me,
I will be higher
than the sky.
I will be brighter
than the sun.
And best of all,
I will be one
with FREEDOM.

When this happens
I will live in my world,
do what I please.
And no one can stop me
'Cuz I'll be free
as anyone could EVER be!
While I still dream.

Answer 1

I think you should write the word because rather than cuz especially if it for a teacher it should be formal

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Answer 2

Yes

Step-by-step explanation:

this is good send it in! it stays in tempo and pushes a meaning across its good.