Question

Got a Project and i need to write a poem. Could someone take a look at it and tell me if it sounds good it is original.

Winter Night ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Spring Day
The leafless trees around me stare.
The temperature too cold to bare.
The stars gaze with curious eyes
At the sound of inconsolable goodbyes
Though the dark bears no light
What a sleepless winter night
If I wake up tomorrow will you be there?
Or will you be gone without a care?
Winter comes and takes away
Everything I want to stay.
But one day I know it will come
Spring, the season where life is from
To replenish what winter took away
There comes the golden spring day

Answer 1

Perfect But....

Step-by-step explanation:

Maybe shorten the winter part a little bit. Add more to the Spring. Overall it’s such a wonderful poem....

Hope this helped!

~Oreo

Answer 2

yes! it sounds awesome!