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This is a new song im working on..tell me what yall think..

was i a fool to think you were in love with me?
i guess so now if you don't mind ima turn off the power to me heart
wont let no one else inside (no one else)
soo don't expect me to be smiling (smiling yea)

How am i suposed to love again when you played me for a fool!
No don't come my way
don't even look me in the eye's and tell me your sorry!!

User Americo
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Some parts are too basic and you would hear that in many other songs. So whatever you think you can change to make it more unique but keep the same meaning in a line, like changing the words up and keeping the same meaning. That would make the lyrics seem more meaningful and thought out instead of more basic and rushed. But the premise of the song is good just make it more unique and complicated to keep people reading the lyrics to understand what u are trying to convey or what you actually mean!!!!
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