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1. Kelly has made the revisions taking out information and adding information) her editor has suggested.
2. She was trying to meet a deadline, so she made some grammatical errors (punctuation, capitalization,
spelling, or wrong word).
3. Proofread the paper and make the corrections Kelly needs to make before the story can be published.
4. Rewrite the corrected paragraph below.
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I visited the harbor on Saturday Septmber 30 I was after a Gang of Smuggleres operating out of
a 4-engine boat docked at peir 3 A Quick view of the vessel showededthe anchor safely down? i
walked up the gangplank onto the deck and looked for somewere to hide. A barrel with some
ropes in it seemes ideal so i climbed in and weighted? a knothole provided me a perfect view of
the deck of the boat so I could see everything going on. It wasnt long before some mans
appeared. We share the loot tree ways like we always do?" Said one. The others nodded sullenly.
Unfortunately, I choosed that moment to sneeze. They were onto me imediately, dragging me
from the barrel. "A spy. Throw her overboard " cried the one with the black long- eeved shirt!
"look behind you?" I screamed and as they turned, i dove into the murky water? Unfrotunately
the smugllers spotted me and wounded me with a serious shot
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80 points pls help !!! 1. Kelly has made the revisions taking out information and-example-1
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I visited the harbor on Saturday, Septmber 30th, I was after a Gang of Smugglers operating out of a 4-engine boat docked at pier 3. A quick view of the vessel showed the anchor safely down. I walked up the gangplank onto the deck and looked for somewhere to hide. A barrel with some ropes in it seemed ideal so I climbed in and waited. a knothole provided me with a perfect view of the deck of the boat so I could see everything going on. It wasn't long before some men appeared. "We share the loot three ways like we always do?" said one, The others nodded sullenly. Unfortunately, I chose that moment to sneeze. They were onto me immediately, dragging me from the barrel. "A spy, throw her overboard!" cried the one with the black long-sleeved shirt. "Look behind you!" I screamed as they turned, one dove into the murky water. Unfortunately , the smugglers spotted me and hurt me with a serious gunshot wound.

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