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I need someone to check my grammar on my poem please

A dark place

say goodbye
tear stained, blood stained
you once promised me infinity
a dying rose on the table, a silver heart
not but a tear
not but a gift

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Answer:

Seems pretty good.

Maybe instead of "tear stained, blood stained" you do

tear stained; blood stained

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