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"Life of Harsh" part l
Once apon a time A man and A women was in a bad argument, so the neighbor came to check on her friend. Her friend is the women name Lacey, so the neighbor went knocking at the door, an a man name Derco went to answer the door, the neighbor said is my friend "okay", Derco said "yes mind your business"" can i come in an check on her" said neighbor "NO MIND YOUR BUSINESS" Derco yelled. You making this hard on yourself because i can call the police for violence. "yes come in" with a fake smile,also with a knife behind his back. she get to walking in the house '' what a loving home" said the neighbor, what is your name Derco said, My name is Hannah said the Neighbor "oh that's nice" said Derco. As Derco gets to the top of the stairs, he turn around and push her down the stairs and then ran down the stairs and stabbed her twenty times in the face. Lacey came down the stairs and seen blood on the walls and then look at Derco and seen blood on his hands and shirt. " OH MY GOD" what did u do to her you know what im calling the police im tired of you said Lacey. "if you do call the police u will wish u never did" said Derco. I'm not scared of you" so she called the police. Derco ran to her and stabbed her more times than he stabbed Hannah. " this is 911 what is your emergency" Derco answer the phone and said that was a mistake. Okay Goodbye said the police. Derco started crying "what did i do I guess u deserved it". The police and the government came beating on the door. Derco answered the door " you are under arrest for First degree murder. You have the right to remain silent if u do say anything, what u say can be used against you in a court of law.
THE END Part 2 coming soon
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