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Help please , why does this paragraph lack sentence variety

Help please , why does this paragraph lack sentence variety-example-1
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Answer:

Each sentence begins with a subject.

Step-by-step explanation:

The entire paragraph is basically "Corey did this" and "Corey did that"

There's no variety, since it always begins with Corey.

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Answer:

Each sentence begins with the subject.

Each sentence begins with "Cory." He is the subject.

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