Someone please review this poem and give me feedback.
(the topic is BLM)
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We all bleed the same blood
We all shed the same tears
But you treat me different
You don’t seem to understand,
I can’t change who I am
My skin tone empowers me
My skin tone enlightens me
My skin tone represents me
It’s who I am, and it’s beautiful on me
Why is being me a crime?
Does my skin color sicken you?
Even though its beauty glistens in the sun
Why is being me a crime?
Because I shouldn’t have to walk around
Scared of what will happen to me
A young boy was killed on the street
While walking by to get groceries
A young man was killed on the street
While his neck was under a knee
These things happen every day
Sometimes I can’t help but be afraid
I have many questions
For those who wish harm upon my family and me
I want them to tell me why being me is a crime
I want them to tell me why my skin tone disgusts them
I want them to tell me why I can’t walk these streets freely
I want them to tell me why…
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please give honest feedback and how I can improve as much as I can
this is for a contest so i want to make sure its good