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it's great but be sure to check your grammar! on main topic 3 you start with "Now, did you ever thought" but it should be have you ever thought! good luck
i think its great tbh
there's no mistake, with details, very persuasive and discriptive, you also included Data /stastistics from different sources,
great job!
p.s good luck on your essay bby<3
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