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Can you read my essay and tell me what to improve? (second part)

Can you read my essay and tell me what to improve? (second part)-example-1

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Answer:

it's great but be sure to check your grammar! on main topic 3 you start with "Now, did you ever thought" but it should be have you ever thought! good luck

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i think its great tbh

there's no mistake, with details, very persuasive and discriptive, you also included Data /stastistics from different sources,

great job!

p.s good luck on your essay bby<3

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