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How could you combine the first two sentences to improve the clarity of the paragraph?

George Washington was Americas first and greatest president. America was started in 1776 with the Declaration of Independence. He was born in 1732. He stopped the Whiskey Rebellion from becoming a war in Pennsylvania. He kept us out of war in France. His experience as an army officer helped him avoid two wars during his presidency. Washington's greatest example was retiring after only two terms.

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Answer:

"America was started in 1776 with the Declaration of Independence and America's greatest President, George Washington, was the first president. "

The best way to go about combining the two would be to do so chronologically. This means that the earlier event should be first and then the latter event would follow.

America being started was the earlier event so it came first and George Washington being President came after America was started so it would come second.

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