Question

Read the passage, which lacks vivid description, strong imagery, and dialogue. Then rewrite the passage to include description and dialogue in a way that shows Denise is relieved and joyful.

Passage
Just as the final school bell rang, Ms. Smithers handed Denise the math test. Denise turned away and flipped it over to reveal the grade, and then she stepped out into the hallway and closed the door. She felt happy. Denise walked down the school hallway and out into the afternoon where her mother was waiting. Denise showed her the test, and her mother was happy too.

Answer 1

Just as the final school bell rang, Ms. Smithers handed Denise the math test. Denise turned away and flipped it over to reveal the grade, and was so over joyed she then she stepped out into the hallway and closed the door. She Denise walked down the school hallway and out into the afternoon where her mother was waiting. Denise was so exited she showed her the test, and her mother was happy too.