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I need help with paragraph editing. The sentence is: it looks like it is going to rain today there are a lot of clouds in the sky the sun is not shining i will play inside if it rains ​

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Answer:

It looks like it is going to rain today there are a lot of clouds in the sky the sun is not shining i will play inside if it rains

Step-by-step explanation:

Condense your writing and only keep the most important ideas. Also add punctuation.

Same sentence + punctuation:

  • It looks like it is going to rain today, there are a lot of clouds in the sky and the sun is not shining. I will play inside if it rains.

Other ideas:

  • The cloudy sky makes it look like it's going to rain today, which means I'll have to play inside.
  • The sun is hiding behind the clouds and I think it might rain soon, which means I will have to play inside.
  • The cloudy sky threatens rain; I will have to play inside if it begins to rain.

(I think you should use a semicolon (;) in the last sentence, not a colon (:) but I may be wrong)

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