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Im writing an argument paper and need someone to tell me if my introduction sounds good.

my topic is: should poetry be taught more in school?
(intro must include a hook, background info, and a thesis)

Think into the past during your English classes while you were learning poetry. Were the lessons for poetry in-depth? Did they make you think? Or were they just simple things like reading and writing a few poems and answering some questions on famous poems. Lessons about poetry always seem so short and brief. It never feels like kids are being taught in-depth poetry. It’s always just the basics like some of the types of poetry written or why poetry is important. Teachers don’t usually teach the emotional connection poetry has so when kids get up into high school English, they struggle when learning poetry. Some English teachers in high school expect emotional connections to the poems or in-depth poems but since kids aren't taught how to do that throughout Elementary and Middle school, they struggle and can’t do it. Poetry should be taught more in school because there are so many things that poetry does for us, such as helping express emotions and feelings, strengthens overall mental health, and it’s even therapeutic for the writer and reader.

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You should use more formal language, for example kids - children, and use more persuasive language and demanding words, other than that, brilliant!
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